A Captive Light, prologue through chapter four

Just notes and observations about the already written A Captive Light.

Prologue:

It's been nearly two years since I wrote this. Looking back, I used to cringe at it, until watching some of season two with my roommates last month. It seems I got Ken pretty well in character. This opening, short and watching the villain has become a favorite type of opening of mine. I rather enjoyed writing it, and the counterpart in the sequel. Just enough of the Evil Plan is given away to worry the audience- something I noticed Ken did in the show. This was this first Digimon fanfic writing I'd done in ages, and it came out nicely, I think. I wrote most of it durning my 11th grade English class.

Chapter One: And So It Begins.

Yes, the title is ripped right off of Digimon season one's first episode. The title, however, wasn't a part of the story until later on, and I still dislike it, but had nothing better to put in. This chapter was rather hard to write- mostly because I took a break for about three weeks from writing all together. I was also very worried about keeping everyone in character- I had to remind myself that Davis and Yolei( who keeps getting her name mangled by me) ought to argue, Gatomon had to be sarcastic, and the digimon.. I hate writing the digimon. They tend to have very... bland personalities- a few traits, but the show was about the kids, mostly. It was awkward. This chapter also marks the entry of my shout out to Tamora Pierce, a favorite author. the Zhannemon, named for the queen of the Stormwings, come from a great series called the Immortals Quartet. Later on, I realised that the Zhannemon and the Stormwings were more alike than I thought.

Chapter Two: Broken Promise.

Return of the funny disclaimers, in a shout out to Avatar, the Last Airbender. If I thought keeping folks in character was hard last chapter, this one was crazy. In my defense, Kari does freak out in the Dark Ocean episode, and in the 7th episode, Davis was a bit more.. tactful. Ish. Still, I feel like I could have done better. This chapter introduces us to the angst of It. It was fun to write, I won't lie. I tend to get into character when I write, and nearly had myself in tears. I had the most fun writing T.K in this, though. I was seriously channeling the Dark Ocean episode for that.

Chapter Three: Gatomon's Fear.

I wrote this chapter after about a month and a half of letting people sit and stew. And I was not kind about it. I really didn't like writing this because I hate writing Evil!Ken, but upon watching season two- particularly the 8th episode- he was just so cruel and cold. So I had to go over the top by my normal villain standards. It was very, very hard to do. I feel like I went too quickly from Ken yelling to Gatomon having her Tramatic flashbacks and flipping out, and some reviewers wanted to know what it accomplished, as Ken already knew the name "Kari". The original draft- some lines got deleted somehow and I forgot to put them back in- had her stay stronger a bit longer, and Ken ask more questions. I also wanted Ken to do some online snooping. I have no Idea how the school system works in Japan, first to admit it. But I had fun. Berkerely is a reference to Berkeley, California, where I used to live.

Chapter Four: False Trail.

This remains one of the longest chapters I've written, at ten pages in word doc. I wrote it all in two days- boy was that crazy. I vowed never to do that again, and did anyway. This was a bit crazy to write0- I got to mess around with character relationships and mostly forgot about the digimon. I particularly liked writing Joe- and his tally of the number of times people were almost killed. One line that I planned that didn't make the edits was a Joke Tai made about Vampires, Myotismon and Twilight. This chapter also sets up a lot of stuff- not for this story but for A Fading Hope. I also made a mistake that I only noticed later about the Digivices- Cody's was Yellow, not blue, and the older ones didn't glow with the crest colors unless they were digivolving. Sigh. No one pointed it out, at least!

~HNA